Cold And Broken Halleluja

Thank you, Azila and CastlesInTheSky. I tend to read my stuff multiple times before I submit it, and yet all those little errors like to hide from me. :D I ...

Loved it. ;) Very suspenseful and the action was perfectly done. The only thing that I could think of to suggest is that the story could use a bit more ...

Thank you for the complements. I do see now it needs some work. The critiquing was much appreciated ;)

I think the ending was really nice. You shouldn't change it. And yes, It had a bit of a cliche feel to it... but I think you added some originality, ...

Very good -I love the 'cranberry splashes' part. I'd have to say it's real descriptive. Lovely! ^.^

I think it flowed nicely. And, though it was simple, it was perfect in its simplicity. Well done!

Wow. Just, wow. The imagery was amazing, and there was a lot of depth to this poem. Good job! I loved the part about the canvas. Very poetic :wink:

Black umbrellas... not something most people would normally write about, but you pulled this off wonderfully. I thought it flowed nicely and had a lot of deep meaning to it. ...

Wow, great imagery! That was really great -and it did flow very nicely :D